Nicole DeLeo

Sorry I couldn't figure out my password to blogspot this is why I am doing day 1 and day 2 of the Home presentation all together, and I also forgot how to post on blogspot... sorry... sometimes i am not the brightest crayon in the tool shed! =/

Day 1

YAEL

Yael was the first one to go, which is rough so I admire her for that. Her concept of home which I got was that home can be in many places; not just at the "home." If she meant to give off this perception of home then she did a really good job, however i felt she was trying to give off a more in debt perception of home which was difficult for me to gather, so I feel she needs to gather all the aspects of her life and umbrella them into one theme. She needs to use that theme to generate her Home and provoke them in a way where the audience is captured by them. Her pictures need to provoke feeling alone, not just text. Also relate each picture with a memory that mainly captures how you feel about that aspect of your life.

ELAINA

Elaina did a great job and I feel her goal is there, but she does needs to work on it so it's right a way captured by the audience. I like how she used a picture of her family, not only to show "this is my family", but to demonstrate that families can grow and welcome new people as well like her sister-in-law. I knew what she meant about her sister-in-law and didn't mean it in a way the class took it. It's important to keep in mind what your audience might perceive each picture and each text to be, so since the class took it in a way that wasn't true is something you can work on. Also your text should show us the relationship your trying to demonstrate, not tell us. Plus something that really helps is that you should ask the audience questions through out your text, this really brings the audience in. I loved what you were trying to show and I really like the theme of your project. Good Job!

FRED

You did a great job in using self explanatory pictures. You really used interesting pictures to describe his home life, and I feel you understood that the pictures need to evoke feeling in the audience, not just when we read the text. What I gathered about the project is that we need to use the picture to tell the story and corner the audience into the perception we want them to think, we only need the text to drive the point home, and to bring the audience into the "moment." I saw a lot of that in yours however the text is a little bit to personal and seems it just about you when in fact the project is about the audience being about you... ask more questions in your text before you reminisce a memory, this captures the audience in a personal way.