5.02.07

Matt
The song Matt opened up with was a great way to express his feelings towards his fiancée; the background he gives us about how they met is very interesting and also seems to be like a plot to a movie. I liked the way you acknowledge both New York and Louisiana to be great cities. I found very kind and generous that you would spend your time building a church that you weren’t even sure people would come to, however you should mention the religion you built it for as well.
I like the way you showed us how your friends are really always there for you no matter what, the fact that you met them not so long before they invited you into their house shows a lot of character from them and also helps us understand how you consider them as a family. You used friends in the last clip that was viewed which definitely showed us how much friend’s equals family to you. You however think about another way of phrasing either type of those friends just to make it seem a little different than the other.

Jen
Jen opens up with a diagonal picture of herself pointing at “herself” which to me seems very self obsorped and might give off the sense that she views herself as home. Which is a very clever concept, and helps us understand that you feel that where ever you go you’ll always be at home. When you show us the picture of you and your roommates which to you are another thing that reminds you of home in Jordan. Jordan is a place I have never been or would probably go to, but you went and even mention how at first you were afraid but near the end you felt comfortable to even smile, this shows how no matter where you are you feel at home.

Safiya
Your opening is very creative, but I think you can position the paper differently by putting the graffiti in the background and your sister and you in the front. You mention how the picture makes you feel at home because you received it from your sister. It shows the love you share with her, which is pretty ironic using her in the next link Frienemies where she poses with you seeming like there is a lot of tension going on there.
In your last picture you show your true nationality and your writing shows a lot of compassion towards the land. The only editorial advice I would give you to rearrange the background in most of your slides.