3rd

Matt

I really like your opening music. We got lots of information from his first text; he is going to marry in September, and he help to build a church. Matt come from other state and moving to NY with his friends, I think you can tell audience some story from your past, not just your friends, or your relationship with church, I think it will be great to peer other people. Matt did the good job on the page with her GF, I like the way he presents, I think friends play a big part of your life. Great job!



Jen

Jen put a diagonal picture on her opening page, it’s very creative because I try to flit my computer and can see it clearly. (from her blogspot) It brought us the message that she felt home when she is there. It’s easy to understand that why you put this picture connect to your text. From your roommate picture, shows relationship between you and you roommate, you felt happy live with them. Then you show us the picture in Jordan, it’s important to you because your gain experiments from travel. Since you are really independent and intelligent, you can focus on something that audience really wish to know, maybe do you got the hard time live without your family, or what makes you feel you are the home. Anyway I like your project.

Safiya

It’s a little confused about the opening picture, while I read the text and realized why is that important to you, family took big part of your home concept. I think you can take a picture from behind while your sister is drawing that picture for you. I like your flag, it’s really important to you and audience can catch up your feeling easily. Since you brought audience to your world, you can give us more stories about your hometown, I would like to see what’s different between the home here. Good job, Safiya.

Eddie

I like the way you starting to show us your concept about home. Your first picture shows your family members, I think it’s a really good picture because their emotion and the background attract audience’s eye, we can see you have a good time with them. You next picture shows your brother and your mom, you can tell us more stories about them. I really like your designs in the pages, how picture and texts located, you did the good job.