Home Project

Karen- I can't seem to figure out if the first image is supposed to show gloomy in a sad way or a good way. I understand the paragraph about how home is changed yet you still find similarities such as the local seven eleven. Are you trying to portray that you miss your old home and this is just not the same, or is this a presentation of you glad to see that your new home can be very similar to your old home and this is a good thing. The distance to seven eleven is important as well. Has this place become a home to you as you have mentioned in the paragraph or are you afraid to enter. Also your text is very happy, yet your pictures are dark. The picture of your door is a good way to introduce your apartment. You are inviting through the front door which is cordial and a good way to start. The images on the sides are very helpful. Had you not had the pictures of the hammer, we may not have understood your text about building your apartment and the importance of that sense of independent. You show that you and your roommate tend to procrastinate which is VERY common in college students. The three locks on the door may tell us that you don't really feel so secure in your new home. Two girls living on their own in a new place can be scary. Are you scared? You can go into that perhaps. The last image of the couch is cute. Your lifestyle revolves around lounging around on the couch just doing your thing whatever it is you want to do. My only advice for revision would be to work on luring in your audience better within your paragraphs.