Notes on the Home presentations

Yaels Presentation

The presentation starts with a picture of children posing in a mountainous location. They all look happy and excited to be where they are. What I got out of it was that they like to travel and as a family. I think that this photo captured the right idea. The text did in fact re-assure my idea. The next photo of the baseball glove was interesting. I understood where you wanted to go with this, but it was only after I had read the text. I think that there needs to be more in the picture that shows that you played little league and that it was a big family event, like your previous picture. I liked to photo of you and your friend. I understood that your guys are close friends if not family, you like to fool around (the dirt on your faces and you are both in a shower) and you enjoyed each other's company to say the least. I personally don't think that anything needs to be altered with this photo; I'm interested because I think that people have those friends that they feel so comfortable with that they can be wild and crazy with. What I wasn't sure about was the picture of the picture of New Hampshire. Origanaly I thought that you liked art. If I thought about it for more than my initial reaction, I would probably understand that your idea of home was this place. Also, I was lost here; why am I supposed to care? I think there are ideas and emotions that can be brought out relating to the photo that can get people's attention. I liked the passenger seat car. I think that there is a big audience of people who experienced driving around aimlessly and didn't have a care in the world. My one critique would be to get the car out of the driveway and take a picture of you driving, to get that idea of the road ahead of you. I think now that the project was cleared up, It will be easier to fix.

Elaina' Presentation

I like your start. Get the idea about the family and they are close. Maybe, you can crop the picture slightly to get the EXIT sign out of the picture, as well as the hand. I liked the light brown background with the painted veins. And,maybe change the wording of how you describe your relationship with your sister-in-law to get the idea of her not being a burden, as talked about in class. I thought that it was an interesting picture of the bathroom. Emediatly thought of sharing a bathroom because of the two sinks. I also thought that it had to be the bathroom of two females because of how clean it is. Maybe you can add things to the picture to get the idea of how close you are to your sister because that is not what I think of when I see a bathroom. The picture of you and your sister was good. You can tell that you both are sisters because you look similar, you are gestures with your body that indicate that you are close, you are wearing similar cloths. I think if talked more to the audience you would get attention because the text gives a good store line of being homesick and the reunion, but I think it needs more body. I think that the picture of you and your bracelet should not be posed; it looks almost fake. I think that you have some one take a picture of you with your hands at your sides with the bracelet you would get the idea that you wear it all the time and it means a lot to you. You had my attention with the stethoscope text. This was also posed. Maybe if you incorporate your mother in the picture you would get the idea that your mother is a doctor, rather than thinking that you like stethoscopes. I think that it can all be sorted out and I think that the project can be very evoking if handled the right way.