Home Project analysis

Matt- I liked the way you opened up your first slide with music. It set a mood for the entire project. It was a very romantic beginning. You set the tone that this will be a serious presentation. But then in your paragraph you introduce yourself to us in a very casual and less serious way. The first picture of any presentation not only has to bring in the audience and make us want more but also has to be a introduction that will introduce the rest of your pictures. I like that this is where you are going to begin because its like you start by telling us where you are now and then you go into how you get their which is a cool way to bring in the audience. Such as the reason you came to NY and the friends you came with. The slide of the church has a lot of new information which I don't think the image really portrays. You cant really tell your in a church and it seems before reading it that you are in a band and that is why you came to NY. Your friends picture is really authentic and beautiful.

Jen- My only issue with your project was your text that was hard to read. I like the way you start with the sideways picture. It shows that you are unique and you don't want to portray yourself in a plain fashion. Also the word ME flashing makes me feel like its a show on Broadway or something. You are flashing to the audience that this presentation will be entertaining. The picture of your friends show you guys are being adults together and being independent living on your own. Its very exciting and nervous at the same time. You guys rely on each other like family and have that sort of comfort. You cook together which shows unity inside your apartment. You have established your own community away from the community you grew up in which shows character in you. The way you spoke about the "girls bunk" gives a sense of youth and that there is also a "boys bunk." The Petra slide connects to both previous slides. You are with your friends but it also shows your adventurous and unique. Home seems to follow you wherever you go. Is this your theme? If so its really go and you should continue it in my opinion.

Safiya- Your first slide is a bit confusing to me. I understand how this image is important to you. You received it from your sister and it made you realize how much she looked up to you. However, I wonder what home is to you through this image. My opinion of revision would be to defiantly keep this image up because it is important but maybe choose a new home page image to grab the audiences attention. The frenemies picture really portrays your sister and your relationship. Its a cute and catchy title that enhances the audiences attention. The paragraph as well shows us your relationship with your sister. You talk about how different the two of you are yet how close you could be with her. I like how you mention her age and that you respect her as if she is not younger than you. Your image on Trinbingonia shows us where you come from which is interesting and important. I like the way you show us how each color reminds you of something else and its more that just as flag to you.

Eddie- The red background shows boldness. The boldness which introduces to us what kind of person you are. The choice of the first image shows how you think that family and having a good time is important to you. Your family means a lot to you and you want to show us that. I like how you used Albanian language to introduce yourself. You are bilingual and should use it throughout your presentation if that's whats important to you. The picture of your brother and mother confuses me. By just looking at the picture I notice that there is a lot of love and care for the two people in the image. It is a blizzard outside which can be uncomfortably cold yet they are just happy to be together in the picture. You however are not in the image yet you discuss your relationship to each of them. Are you as close with your mother as your brother seems to look in this picture? I would like to see more stories involved. You mention in the first image where that picture was taken but you didn't put it in your paragraph. You should, it will appeal to the audience.