may 2 presentations by Eddie

Matthew:
I really enjoyed your presentation. You did a good job and it was great that you put your project on the wiki. I especially enjoyed the photographs of your friends that you came to New York with. It was an interesting picture because it was black and white and your friends looked really young. So I was shocked to find out that they were actually married. I thought that you did a good job in your text and it was evident that friends equal home to you. I also found it very interesting that you are engaged and I would have loved to find out more about that but unfortunately I missed the first few minutes of your presentation. The only thing that I think you can improve on is maybe putting some photographs of your church because you mention it very often.

Jen:
You did a really cool presentation, I love the opening picture of yourself, and it showed a lot of personality on its own. I thought that the photograph of your roommates was good and it explained what home is to you but I was not completely drawn into it, maybe you could add a picture of you and your roommates together. My favorite picture was of you in Jordan, I thought this was especially interesting since you are from Israel. You did mention worrying when you were on your trip but I would have loved if you elaborated on why did you worry? And why did you decide to go to Jordan to begin with? Another thing that you may want to add is if you are bilingual then maybe express that in your writing.


Safiya:
You chose a good opening picture which was really creative. I don’t know that the background was the best color for it because it took away from the photograph. I also think that you should make the picture a little bit bigger so we get a better view of it. I was surprised to find out in your text that your sister had made this for you so it gave the picture a whole new meaning. It gave the photograph a meaning of love and compaction which I thought was really great. My suggestion would be to maybe put a picture of your sister next to the graffiti picture so we are not confused to the meaning of the graffiti photograph (at first I thought that you thought you were at the center of what you believed to be home but then reading your text I realized that it was your family). My favorite picture was of your countries flag. I thought that this picture showed a whole other level to your definition of home. Immediately I recognized the flag and thought of the world cup where Trinidad and Tobago did very well for a small nation. I would have really loved if you spoke a bit more about your life in Trinidad and Tobago. Also it would be great if you showed some photographs of the scenery there. I was also interested in knowing how life in Trinidad and Tobago differs from live here in the United States. Other than that it was a really well done presentation.